Music Video First Draft

Here is my first draft for my music video. 

After getting my media teacher and technician to watch the outcome, they gave me some constructive feedback, all of which all I agreed with as they are things I feel uncertain with too. At seconds 0:38, writing appears with a message that enforces the ideology behind the video and the message it carries - "it's impossible to hide who you are....especially from yourself". Both my media teacher and technician said that the quote was good, but the font doesn't tie in well with the video - it looks too basic and standard and does not look one with the video. I was aware of this during the editing process of my video, and It simply remained standard due to the fact that I wanted to see what the fonts on my ancillary tasks were going to be so that I could apply a smiler style/.the same font in order to tie the products together. I will be changing this for my second draft.

Also, my teacher and media technician commented on the clip from seconds 0:44-0:48 - it is edited to cut in time with the music to give a jump clip effect. However, they said that the black lags for too long and doesn't look as though it should be there - they said that the idea is clear and they think it would work well with a different approach. They also recommended replacing the black for white and shortening the length of space between the cuts in the clip or making a jump cut without the blank screen between. I will try both of these things to see which one works the best.

Lastly, they noticed that while I was recently editing, I must have knocked all of the clips out of sync by a fraction of a second as the lip syncing isn;t as in time as it was when I was edition it previously. This isn a mistake I knew I would encounter, but not too complicated to solve if done correctly. I have dealt with this issue a few times while editing, so it is now something i find quite easy to do in comparison to how I found handling it before.