Magazine Advert Draft 2/3 Feedback

Here is the second draft of my music magazine advertisement. I feel despite taking my audience feedback on board, the image still doesn't look like it could be an advert in a magazine.

I decided to add orange streaks of light over the image to enhance the bokeh light effect as I thought that was some good feedback from my audience and made sense. I really like the look of the lighting effect over the image and think it will stay that way.

 However, I do not like the white writing over the image - it looked out of place simply on top of the image, so i attempted to put an translucent black box beneath it to make it look as though it belonged there but this effect doesn't seem to fit very well with this image. I again decided to get some audience feedback on what direction to go in next. 

Emily: "I think that the font needs to be different and that there needs to be a gradient from the bottom that is the same as the background because they've done it on some music magazine adverts that I have seen - they put the text over the gradient".

Beth: "Yes I agree with Emily, that will look better than the box and the font needs to be more standard and less fancy. Also, I think that the logo at the top needs to be a different colour because the red and grey look really out of place with the orange, maybe make it a similar colour scheme to the advert".

I think I will give this a try because I do not like how this image looks at the moment.